What were the odds?

They met during freshman week and hit it off right away: the proverbial love at first sight. Everyone agreed they were great together. They’d dated a year when Ally invited him for Thanksgiving.
Naveen was nervous about meeting Ally’s parents: he’d saved his money to buy an engagement ring and hoped Ally’s father would allow him to proposer to the love of his life.
Ally was anxious upon entering the house. Downright scared when she saw the look her father cast on her lover. Could her father be racist? Turning to her boyfriend, she saw he was just as tense.
“It’s you.” Naveen said, his tone grave.
“Yes.” Her father replied.

What was going on? She looked at her mother whose eyes filled with tears, as she hugged her.
“I’m sorry, honey.”
“He’s your half-brother.” Her father said.
The world fell apart. She cried.
“He’s my baby’s father.”


149 words

In response to Mindlovemisery’s Menagerie’s Saturday Mix offered by Lorraine Love with a twist


8 Comments Add yours

  1. Lorraine says:

    Wow — I’m breathless at the twists and turns. This is the darker side of love to be sure — nicely crafted; didn’t see that ending coming at all.
    Thanks for participating with this excellent tale.

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    1. Thank you. I’m still working on your Dark Side Tale Weaver prompt but I’ve been on this side since then 😉.
      Thank you again 🙏🏻🙏🏻


      1. Lorraine says:

        As you commented to Michael — the prompts this week are rather dark — even inviting the darker side of love (as you so well did).
        I think my next turn it’s a lighter side — the “write whatever you want with a lighter pen and without the black clothes” sorta prompt. If its not in two weeks, it’s coming soon.
        I’ve been in a dark mood myself– as you guessed — I think my prompts reflect me more than I realize at the time of writing.
        Ooops — long comment. I do tend to go on. That’s why flash fiction is a good discipline for me. Smiling and laughing.

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        1. I think our writing in general allow us a form of catharsis. I know I dealt with a number of issues through writing them. Sometimes I put them through a lot mor than I’ve experienced but it still enables me to come to terms with issues I don’t necessarily want to speak about with a shrink 😜😜.
          Hope your mood lightens up and things get better.
          And never worry about long comments I enjoy them 😉


        2. Lorraine says:

          Writing is a form of catharsis, I agree. It’s also been a form of therapy for me — like you, my characters “speak” for me and good or bad do often experience life at a hyper-real level. There is always a piece of me buried somewhere within what I write.
          I have been trying to keep my comments short/shorter — the flash fiction version — but it’s good to know that you don’t mind when it’s the long form. Smiling.

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  2. C.C. says:

    Wowza. Now that is a twist that packs a powerful emotional punch and makes the reader want to know more. Really well written.

    Liked by 1 person

    1. Thank you very much 🙏🏻


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